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The Making Of

Script

PAGE 22

FLASHBACKS CONTINUE

Panel 1

She throws a fire poker into the room.

CAPTION

So you threw a fire poker in the room, hoping that he would kill me with it. Then you would kill him with the shotgun in the hall.

Panel 2

She walks into his office.

Two birds with one stone. The only man who could expose you dead by the hands of your husband, and your husband killed in self defense. A neat little package, Mrs. Parker.

END OF FLASHBACKS

Panel 3

She pulls the tumbler of the gun.

Aren’t you so smart. Goodbye, detective.

Panel 4

He looks behind him, sees his dead body.

P.I.

Wait, you don’t want to do that.

WOMAN

Why not? 

Panel 5

The two are negotiating, she is trying to figure out if he is lying, he is sweating nervously, but has a cool demeanor, still sitting on the kitchen floor with her towering over him.

P.I.

If you shoot me, you’ll die. I can see it.

WOMAN

You’re just trying to save yourself.

Panel 6

The sweating Stanley Gruber grins (close up?)

P.I.

Wanna take that risk?

Layouts

Notes:

Panel 1 - can this be a low angle shot, looking up at an evil grinning D as she throws the firepoke into the room, the firepoke can extend into panel 2. That would be neat.

Panel 2 - I assume she is walking into the P.I.'s office here, this is still a flashback moment. If yes, great. If panel 1 and 2 change in size to make panel 1 work better, I don't care.

Panel 3 - make sure there is enough room for the word balloon

Panel 5 - make sure that the dead body is the P.I.'s dead body - he's bluffing here.

Panel 6 - great, as long as we can see this is a nervous grin, the grin of a bluffer, NOT a confident grin.

Roughs

Page 22: The arm of the lady looks a bit strange, maybe photo reference this panel, it is a difficult pose

Pencils

Colors

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Credits

Script and Production: Lorenz Lammens

Art: Raffaele Ricciardi

Colors: Kote Carvajal

All artists where paid a professional rate for the production of this comic (except for poor Lorenz who did all the paying).

This WebComic is published under the Emerging umbrella, a project that seeks to find and develop new talent in the industry. The best artists participating in the Emerging project are developed until they can join one of our pro teams.

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